My Chance
For two years
We were together
From 9th grade Snow Days
To the day where you
Held my heart gently
Then threw it on the ground
Which it then was severed
A glass globe covered in ice collides with the ground
"It just hasn't been going well"
You began
"It's just not fun anymore"
A piercing jolt stabs my body
"So I'm sorry but I'm breaking up with you"
Then a simple pat on the shoulder
As you apparently thought appropriate to cripple my spirit
You then walked away, out of my sight
I was consumed by tears of hurt, sorrow, and confusion
However
I should have said something
Anything
To tell you how I felt
To show that I was the victim
Of your treachery
To think that days before
You said to me "I love you too"
That statement meant nothing to your mind
The same as seeing a poor person on the street
And walking right by without a glance
Instead of spending that day crying,
(A vision of me frozen in place with shock appears)
I should have been stronger
Maybe have gotten a little angry
I needed to tell you
You're arrogant
A know-it-all
That you aren't the greatest person on the Earth
And no, the world would not be better
If they were all like you
But sadly
I lost my chance
Because now it's been awhile
Since that day
And now it wouldn't mean anything
Besides
Someday you may hear what's needed
By another person
A revelation of your aura
But it won't be me because I've moved on
I found someone else
My pain put away in a tiny box of my memories
Although like a faded memory it reappears
Once in awhile
But I easily put it back into it's tiny storage place
(even though it was super long...) it had a really good flow and kept my interest. it was very visual and you had some amazing lines! definitely makes me want to give this guy a piece of my mind!
ReplyDeleteI like all the emotion you put into it... it takes the reader there with you...maybe you could end it a little differently though.
ReplyDeleteI really like it some good imagery but you really get the story out
ReplyDeleteI know I've been there!